Jami Lynn's Random Impulse
Skittles of the rainbow
dropping off
one by one into a dark maze
heading to the bottom
of the slate rectangle
that holds this candy
in the palm of it's hand
until it's all eaten by the shark
that controls it's taste.
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Yay, poetry... Oh, how I have missed doing this in our class. I really enjoyed this excerpt because it is very visually pleasing. If this poem is going to stand alone as a poem itself (and not just a stanza from a poem) then I think it needs location, experiential elements, and syllabic rhythm. Good job though!
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