Monday, February 28, 2011

Random Impulse

Sorority Sister Susie
Whitney Johnson

A text message from a sister informed me that
The heavy hand which use to hold
Your mother’s finger
Has fallen limp. After this, I was told
Who strangled it: you,
With quick slurps,
Cupped the foam on top to
Soak into your red streams.
You dumb shit, Susie.
I guess, at , the cells
Were on their last plea
And on their list a few
Last check marks—silent strokes
Swing like a jeweled pendulum
Across your belly button as you laugh.
Sometimes I think I get it, Susie:
Your fuckometer paces in
Anticipation, your entire lively
Corpse, actually, numb, an orgasm
Dismembering from a high. You
Choked, in the smoke filled room,
Fanaticizing a night of neon dreams…
But that final sip,
Susie: an irreplaceable savor.
The professor of the health department
Still teaches daily, waving slightly
To the text book of mishaps.
Then church bell rings
At , every time, Susie,
Every time. There is the sweet feel
Of wind whipping around the steeple
From ground to sky; there’s needful
Bees pollinating withered blooms;
There’s grumbling—even when it coughs;
Skittle-sized infections, blue lungs;
And kingdoms, much like yours, Susie,
Of superficial societies, but kingdoms…
You must have craved to be ruler of the kingdom,
Or else they convinced you.
And now, you sink into your infected stream
Beneath the wheat fields. The cows, perhaps,
Fertilizing the golden wheat that floats
Down your stream.
Susie, you dumb shit.
Whatever, whoever,
Must still love you.

Saturday, February 26, 2011

Junkyard

… The serpent didn’t hiss
     to Adam and Eve, “Hide your nakedness!”
     He wore his best suit, and whispered, “Look at this!”

Eyes closed, I drift amid their resonant sibilance, soft hiss and crackle in the tide wash, ubiquitous underwater, a buzz like static, or static electricity—but not mechanical—organic and musical, metallic as casino muzak, piles change raked together, a handful of pennies down a child’s slide.

& diamonds roped like a noose around throats of harbors beneath

… shot through a hole, and everything we know
goes in there, where it feeds a blaze.

But time is tied to the wrist
Or kept in a box, ticking with impatience.

The woman looks up from her book.
The man takes a sip of his drink.
Then there is nothing but the sound of their looking,

the lapping of lake water, and a call of one bird
then another, cries of joy or warning—
it passes the time to wonder which.

Response

Cashier
By Kimberly Rigsby

The time goes by
Slower than ever.
Only two hours left
I say to myself.

I grab a box, beep.
How may more days,
Beep, months, and years
Will I be here, beep.

"That's $27.53, sir."
I take the cash,
And give some back.
"Have a good day."

"Yyou too, Miss."
Have a good day?
I can have a good day
In one hour and 58 minutes.

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Kimberly, I really liked the suspsenful aspect that you had going throguhout this poem. I suppose that whoever is making the purchase is really, really, nervous about something. I must say when I first started reading the poem, I thought that the main person in the poem was about to rob the cashier. I did struggle with the ending a bit, and the subject matter of the poem. I think a great poem for you to read would be "Money" by Ted Kooser. Look it up and see what he did with the cashier in this poem. If you can't find it, then let me know and I will bring you a copy. Great Job!

Response

How Easy It Is
By Goldbarth

This poem speciafically caught my attention. I have been reading quite a few poems lately that are based off of the ideas of an elegy. This poem, in my opinion, defiantely has some of those aspects to it as well. I like the heavy sounds of some or the lines throughout the poem because the poem itself is a harsh story, recapping the cruel murder of a family. The beginning of the poem begins as a 5 and 6 year old are dying. There is just enough detail to convey the cruel intentions of the murderer. There is also a sense of connect throughout the poem, but yet also, a disconnect. I also like how there are lines throughout the poem that are short and get the message acorss clearly, such as "days go by". Though this poem was about murder, I found it quite interesting. It reminded me of Capote's novel In Cold Blood.

Writing Poetry
Subject

Quite often, when I try to sit down and write a poem, I think to myself Oh yeah I will write a poem about this or that. Well, I found out the hard way that does not work... at all. At least for me. Usually, i try to mimic a poem or a line that I like, then try to change it in a way that characterizes my writing style, which is... I'm still working on finding it. This chapter helped me realize that you can take a subject, however, and and transform it into a poem. I found this very helpful. And after watching a 2 hour special on bigfoot the other night (yes, bigfoot... one of those things you have a hard time changing the channel with...), I realized how interesting a fictional topic could be in poetry.

Sunday, February 13, 2011

Random, Very Random Impulse

Softening

Like the alphas tucked in boxed chocolates
Doing that which clogs the spout 'til they are limp,
The path they hoped their other halves would grate
Is a whisp of dissent that strangles them.

If they wish to vacate the hole, then go rest in it
Until you gentle her with a sword that offers the hue,
Or a slice of the fence thats repeats like a storm cracks
In the sparkles of the reflecting faced rightside up.

She won't save herself from grinding a stylish rag.

Reading Response

Writing Poetry: Subject

I found this chapter very helpful because I often sit down at my computer and think that I am going to write a poem about a specific subject; however, I realized that was SO difficult. The prompts in this chapter helped with my subjects. I also found that making a list of different things/aspects of my life now and throughout my childhood have helped me incorporate different ideas within the text of my poem.

Russell Edson: Counting Sheep

I really loved reading this poem because it was sooo interesting. The first line had me hooked-- "a test tube full of sheep". Seriously, what is that? I don't know, but I love it. I can only imagine how Edson came up with this great poem. Perhaps he pulled a junkyard quote out and built around that? I do understand that Edson thinks of his poetry as being a part of the dream's mind, which i find fascinating. Throughout these readings in Word of Mouth, I have realized most of the poets develop an obsession. That's great.

Response

Rebekkah Jack's
The Ride
The sound of horse's hooves fill the night's silence.
They greet each other with whining whinnies
As one by one they walked into the warm-up arena.
The air is shadowed by their smoky breath as they snorted.

My mount neighed beneath me.
My heart was racing as the gate opened calling for my class.
He snorted and pawed his leg waiting for my command.
I touched his side with my heel. 
We shot forward.
His legs driving hard into the soft dirt.

The gate was narrow, but he guided us through with ease.
The bright lights of the arena blinded me, but my mount continued forward.
Cheers filled the room as we trotted towards the wall.
My heart was pounding with the beat of his hooves.

I pushed him forward, forcing him to trot higher.
The cheering grew as they saw his change
His panting breaths cue my own
We lap one last time, the cheers rang in my ears.


Sweat pours from me and my mount.
Our breathing is slow, but deep as we stand in line.
My heart has calmed as I pat my mount on the neck.
They call our name and he neighs his approval.


My last ride on my mount, but one to remember.
We trot one last time.
Screams and cheers filled the arena
But I could not hear them over his snorting breath.
Tears came to my eyes, but not from the cheers.
It was from the ride.

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Rebekkah, wonderful job with the imagery. I also like how you have a specific, set location for the poem-- that also helps add to the imagery for the poem. I do have one recommendation for your poem that would help enhance the language of the poem and make it stronger-- Use kennings. Kennings derive from the Anglo-Saxon time period; it is when two nouns are put together to represent another noun. For example, bone house= body, feather plane= bird, etc. I think it would be helpful to come up with these for the word "mount" and other words that you use throughout the poem several times. Great job!

Response

Hannah's Ode to Kellen

Ode to Kellen
Its strange not seeing you here
The flower vases filled with dead daisies
The movie case shut tight
It feels empty even with my life
Filling this space
Being here will never be the same
All of the fun memories we shared
School, parties, and cooking together
I put away your favorite wine
Hoping, praying that maybe you would come back
But I know in my heart
You can never return
I wonder if the Angels would be angry
If I thought of joining you?
I look for any reminder of you
But find none
You took everything with you to Ireland
Even though six days later
You would never see it again.
I miss you.
I will always cherish you.
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Hannah, sorry to hear of such a tragic loss for you-- I know it is a touchy subject. The poem did seem as if you had lost someone you loved. However, if you had not written a bit of info at the beginning, then I would have never known most of the background information that makes the poem so important to you. I think this poem is great and could use some more personal aspects to it. For example, make a list of personal activities you and Kellen use to do together, as well as locations you visited, etc. then incorporate them into the poem. I think this would be a great finishing touch for the poem! Great job!

Wednesday, February 9, 2011

Junkyard... Straight from my first day of student teaching...

First day of student teaching sixth graders:

"You are blonde, you must be friends with Lady GaGa."

"Just because I am fat, does not mean I eat chicken."

Me to student: "No, you may not call me mommy."

"I did not freakin' say that I freakin' said freakin' not fuckin'."

"My mom makes the really good kind of brownies...."

Student points to my butt: "You have a tail!!".... 'Cool?' I think to myself.

"You are pretty. Is your friend a hoe?"

fyi: seriously rethinking this teaching profression....

Saturday, February 5, 2011

Random Impulse

Done

Silver sensations of screams
Evoked by ten cent thrills,

Kept waiting by the shatters
Of Earth in the riddled air.

Served in the house of bones
Stood the canny business twine,

That lassoed the golden youth
And shoved the shutter maker aside.

Worn from inked skin sketches
Dancing in the bare eye,

Sauntered and visited, watched
The bright quarter in the sky.

Dark holes in the ground
Traps resembling ticks to the flesh,

The low resin seeping like scorn,
My home in tethers lingers smoke.

Reading Response

Response 1: Writing Poetry-- Voice
I found it difficult to read this chapter because, as I was reading, I thought to myself  'Oh my goodness, what exactly is my voice when writing poetry?' As I read further, I grasped onto a few techniques that specifically caught my eye, such as the section entitled "Assuming the voice of others." This made me realize that I do not always have to write a poem based off of my actual experiences, or even from my own opinion. I especially enjoyed the poem "Respect, 1967"... I think I may steal some of it, or at least borrow it for a little while. In the section "Throwing your voice", I found it difficult to relate to the 'I dont know' theory that suggests poets should sometimes keep that mentaltity while writing. I need to work on throwing my voice with what I do and don't know.

Response 2: Writing Poetry-- Style
I like style. So why is it so difficult for me to develop my own style?-- It's quite frustrating. In the section "Starting in style", the text implies that we should conciously study and assimilate to style, absorbing different types of poetry to help gain exposure to style. I couldn't agree with this more. I do, however, want to mimic other poets' styles, but have a hard time doing so-- mostly because I try to mimic it TOO much. I also enjoyed the poem "stylistic arrogance"... I couldn't think of a better example than Richard Hugo. it is my goal to develop a stylistic arrogance to my writing.

Response... About David's Turtles (Since it's all the rage...)

Latherwhopple
By: David Mathis

Ancient and oaken, he opened his creaking mouth
And when he spoke, it was wheezy and slow:
''The stars were once crystal and they shone in the
Sky during both day and night; a ceaseless glitter
hung in the air and it was so beautiful.''

His shell was a variegated brown and green.
The moss hung in trees like curtains-- maiden's hair.
Shadows crept and grew and the great brown turtle
Inhaled, breath ragged and raspy. He inhaled
The leaves, the petals, the seeds; he breathed life.

His old bones creaked, the grass swayed and he yet
Still drew his breath before settling down, looking
Out across the failing light of day, waiting and watching.
''The stars will erupt anew one day, though my tired
Eyes will never see it come to pass.''

-The End-
 
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I had to read this poem because I heard quite a few people in class discussing it. I enjoyed it. Especially the title of the poem... David-- What's a Latherwopple? haha. I imagine its the noise of rain that splashes in the creek next to the turtle's house... Just a guess. The title is so comical sounding, but yet the poem seems so serious. And I am quite curious why part of the poem is in "quotes"? I really enjoyed this poem because I could invision the imagery of the turtle of his whereabouts so easily; however, it had a mysterious tone to it as well. For later revising, I suggest that maybe a different title come into play in order for the tone to shift slightly. Great job.

Response

Frills and Hairballs
by: David Mathis

A curtsy and a soft, warm smile
Framed by golden curls, wispy,
Blowing in a breeze that was cool,
Refreshing even. A sip of tea.

The tea was hot, steaming in its cup.
Soft, padded hands grasped the handle
delicately. Daintily. Pink Dress pressed
with care and a ribbon, faded but new.

She brushed some stray hair from her
Tufted ears. She soothed her tea, calming
And cooling it with gusts of wind from
Her snout. Blackened lips smiled sweetly.

Her legs, crossed, covered in long, golden
Hair. Her tail wrapped around four spindly
Metal legs of a stool. She playfully batted
A stirring spoon with careful claws.

As clouds enfolded the shining sky, she
Gently grabbed an umbrella-- a tastefully
Layered, iced cake-- pink, white, pink.
Slight frame protected from rain, she walked.

Silence between bird calls, soothing shushing
Of raindrops lulled her and cradled her as she
took small, careful steps. Umbrella held just so,
she took the path that wound eventually home.
 
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I love the "kitty" language of the poem. Cats have a certain presence that they present to their humans... So sly and "cool" as they walk, which I really grasp from this poem. Also, I enjoyed it because it seemed as if the cat had a mind of it's own (which they do), but I totally understand what David is trying to do here. this poem is also different at the same time, such as the cake, slightly random, BUT it works. Some improvements-- i got the sense that the cat was "home" already, perhaps I am misinterpreting the poem. there is a lot of the word "her" in the poem- I would suggest developing a new lingering descriptive of the cat that would suggest it was "her". Great job though. Snaps for you!

Junkyard

A lovecharm hidden in his grandmother’s linen...

The woman looks up from her book.
The man takes a sip of his drink.
Then there is nothing but the sound of their looking,

the lapping of lake water, and a call of one bird
then another, cries of joy or warning—
it passes the time to wonder which.

& diamonds roped like a noose around throats of harbors beneath

… shot through a hole, and everything we know
goes in there, where it feeds a blaze.

… The serpent didn’t hiss
     to Adam and Eve, “Hide your nakedness!”
     He wore his best suit, and whispered, “Look at this!”