Response

Hannah's Ode to Kellen

Ode to Kellen
Its strange not seeing you here
The flower vases filled with dead daisies
The movie case shut tight
It feels empty even with my life
Filling this space
Being here will never be the same
All of the fun memories we shared
School, parties, and cooking together
I put away your favorite wine
Hoping, praying that maybe you would come back
But I know in my heart
You can never return
I wonder if the Angels would be angry
If I thought of joining you?
I look for any reminder of you
But find none
You took everything with you to Ireland
Even though six days later
You would never see it again.
I miss you.
I will always cherish you.
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Hannah, sorry to hear of such a tragic loss for you-- I know it is a touchy subject. The poem did seem as if you had lost someone you loved. However, if you had not written a bit of info at the beginning, then I would have never known most of the background information that makes the poem so important to you. I think this poem is great and could use some more personal aspects to it. For example, make a list of personal activities you and Kellen use to do together, as well as locations you visited, etc. then incorporate them into the poem. I think this would be a great finishing touch for the poem! Great job!